Needing Feedback.My first portrait.

[Salisa]

I think some constructive criticism would be helpful.




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[Klaus dk]

It looks to me as if you raised the shadows and darkened the highlights a lot, making this a low-contrast and somewhat flat photograph.

The expression seems desolate and unengaged, and I am not a big fan of tilted cameras.

If this was all intentional, you succeeded in making an unconventional, but also quite unengaging portrait, if not, this is what I would work with if I were you.

Don't be discouraged by this, find your own way and come again.

 

[Charles9600]

I like everything about the girl. The distraction for me is the black line in the wood, and frankly the wood beam too. They are not vertical to the frame and as my eyes try to adjust them, the girl would be falling forward.

Be careful about your background lines taking the eye away from the subject.

Charles

 

[Salisa]

It was not my intention to be unconventional,thank you for your advices .

 

[Salisa]

I'll keep that in mind,thank you .

 

[Purza_00]

I would like to see the focus more on the eyes!

 

[ForrestGump]

Well, my opinion is slightly different from you all folks. Let me start from the background: it's good but not perfect, to me. The only thing distracting me is the tilted line that should be horizontal.

I don't find model espression disengaged. Perhaps she's somehow rigid, but I'd define her expression ethereal, even if her look says the opposite...I don't know if I'm understandable, I'm not a native Englisk speaker. :-(

What I find to be the major flaw of this portrait is the somehow overexposed part of model face, not for the overexposition but just because it tends to blend in the background.

Have a nice day

L.

 

[Daniel Lauring]

It looks to me as if you raised the shadows and darkened the highlights a lot, making this a low-contrast and somewhat flat photograph.

The expression seems desolate and unengaged, and I am not a big fan of tilted cameras.

If this was all intentional, you succeeded in making an unconventional, but also quite unengaging portrait, if not, this is what I would work with if I were you.

Don't be discouraged by this, find your own way and come again.

First, beautiful model and I love the light.

I agree with Klaus.

There is a fine line between a wistful gaze and a blank zombie stare. This one falls a bit too much on the latter. With such gazes I find it is often helpful if the eye is not centered horizontally in the eye. Looking a bit up or down evokes an emotion.

The picture is definitely flat. Blacks aren't fully black. Try cropping and pulling the curve a bit in post.

I don't understand the wall behind her. Why is is tilted relative to her? That distracts. Maybe just framing to that would be enough to move her gaze away from flat horizontal and change the feel?

The color of the window frame competes with her hair.

When someone is leaning against a wall there isn't a lot of room to fuzz out the wall and sometimes less DOF is called for...or move the person forward. In this case it looks like she is leaning against the wall but sometimes you can even fake that...if it improves the shot. For example a model won't actually rest their chin on their hand because it distorts the features but instead they will gently cup their chin, not actually applying any pressure. To the average person it will look the same.