Hmmmm, i have to say, i really dont know. I like it, and then i look again and i dont. I think you may have hit the nail on the head yourself though, too over worked?
I have a slight issue with the ammount of soft-focus, it seems OTT. seems a nice picture that could have worked out really well, just i cant put my fingure on why i cant gel with it.
No a helpful comment so i have to say sorry!