First attempt with Studio Flash (Falcon Eyes)... can use critics

You are completely right.

I have used a screen, by my setup was not very pro like and I could not see upfront what the result would be. I guess that is something I must improve.

Also I feel that there could have been a bit more shadow to give more depth.

And the first picture strikes me a bit as harsh (too much reflection of the skin).

Maybe some skin foundation or something similar could help here aswel.

thanx for the comments, Ik hope the results of my next shooting are as pleasing as this....

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grt, Alex